Semester Portfolio
14.12.16
Interludes on a musical album serve a number of purposes, but one of their more significant purposes is to provide a cushion to listeners as they transfer from one idea in their album to the next. It's meant to give provide a cohesive experience, but never forget; it's a change in ideals. Semester 1 of my sophomore year is an interlude in both my educational career and my life. It's where much of what I think and much of how I perceive a lot of things in life are radically changing, with new perspectives and new ideas. This portfolio details the various significant developments I've made, both educationally and personally. Please enjoy going through my first semester sophomore year portfolio.
Portfolio
IMPORTANT NOTE: Make sure parents answer as a comment to this post. Please label at the top of comment Student name and Parent(s) name.
Parent(s) will answer the questions below:
What piece of writing did you like best in my portfolio and why?
What did you like about my portfolio and sharing and what would you like to see me improve on?
Which of the writing traits (ideas, organization, voice, word choice) do you feel was most successful for me?
Which of the traits of writing would you like me to improve on in the coming semester?
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It is an opportunity for them to comment on your learning and growth.
Your sharing of the portfolio should enable your parents/guardians to reflect and respond to the four questions above.
1 comments
ReplyDeleteCoby Shimabukuro-Sanchez
Parent: Maeshalyn Shimabukuro
I (Coby) typed out what she said, so there may be some slight paraphrasing/rephrasing to ensure that the comment makes sense.
What piece of writing did you like best in my portfolio and why?
The Coming of Age piece was a really nice and truthful piece. I know that, being only a mother to you and Justin and not Kohlton (and you having interacted with Kohlton much more than me over the past several years), you would know this entire thing at the time better than anyone else because you are receiving it. I think what you said in it was very true to what you remember, but translated with effort for people like me, who don't know much at all, to understand and empathize.
What did you like about my portfolio and sharing and what would you like to see me improve on?
You know that I was a graphic designer/artist for a short time before working for Home Depot. Well, your dad did teach me a few basic things about design and I gotta say; even if the website was created through templates and all that kind modern stuff today that makes it easier, I do appreciate your attention to detail throughout the portfolio. The "big" picture you explained in the beginning or end I think, was made clear through the change in background. The thing I'd like to see you improve on with the portfolio though is definitely being innovative or creative in some way. Something like the layout of the text or the pictures; I just don't want you to limit your creativity.
Which of the writing traits (ideas, organization, voice, word choice) do you feel was most successful for me?
I was thoroughly impressed with the Coming of Age essay, so I think voice was the best for you.
Which of the traits of writing would you like me to improve on in the coming semester?
Maybe word choice. I understand that you have quite a big pool in terms of vocabulary, but maybe the combination of the more complicated words you use could be structured and pieced together better, because there were times where I had to reread because of how often you use sentence particles like semicolons and the "--".