KC3 Essay Draft
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Beautiful beaches, luscious mountains; Hawaii is a paradise--or so it seems. It is simply a mask for the other side of paradise that Hawaii deals with; homelessness. Being without a home may just seem like a problem that only the individual is affected by, however, it is a problem that the whole of Hawaii shares. It stems from the premium cost of living--the housing market. It is among the main catalysts of the growing homeless population. The side effects of it not only affects Hawaii socially, but also the industry that is arguably Hawaii’s main source of income--tourism. The homelessness problem is a huge burden in which it affects all aspects of Hawaii leading to its’ struggling economy.
Ground zero for many on the brink of becoming homeless is of course the housing market. Finding a home to reside in especially in Hawaii is often met with difficulty due to how costly it is. According to a report by the University of Hawaii, “The average cost of a one-bedroom apartment in Honolulu is around $1,200 a month, which is out of reach for around 30% of Hawaii’s families, even on two adult incomes.” Keep in mind that this is just the bare minimum to live; excluding all other expenses. Because the housing market has such an immense impact on the economy, higher prices also mean a harder struggle for that 30%. An article on homeless by NBC puts it best; “...Honolulu’s homeless problem is rooted in the pairing of one of the nation’s highest housing costs with below-average wages...” A low wage not only means that it’s more difficult to find a place to live that meets that wage, it also means that there would be a miniscule amount of room left for anything other than a home because of Hawaii’s high cost of living.
A rising homeless population also means more difficulties for some other industries that rely on having clean streets--specifically tourism. Those homeless have very few places to go and thus will often “...spend their days and nights on the beaches, parks, and streets of Waikiki…” with nowhere else to go. Waikiki, which is essentially the center of tourism located in Oahu, is affected through the visually degrading look that the displaced brings. A look in which is obviously undesirable because of the effects it has on how well the industry performs. For example, Calgary, Alberta visitor Ivan Tandberg commented that though the homeless weren’t bothersome, “...it wouldn’t look good to have many people living on the streets.” Being an industry that relies quite a bit on having a visual appeal, ruining it would bring down the economic status of tourism as well. It doesn’t end there though, as it would have a potential domino effect that leads to a less successful economy for Hawaii.
It is also worth mentioning that those without a roof also mean that they are sometimes without social order--a danger to society. It’s certainly not a representation of all of homeless individuals, but it is often seen that way, how “Poor health condition creates difficulty for those trying to assist the homeless population as many are unwilling to accept help in any form.” Mental illnesses, for one, can be a big difficulty to deal with. Their social disconnect would hinder their ability to properly communicate and in some cases, can make them violent. In other cases, it may also be that they simply don’t want help. Sherri Watson, 43, and homeless, stated that “I love it; free rent, free electricity, who wants to stay in a bed-bugged shelter?” This means that some, like Watson, like the advantages that come with being homeless. The environment, being somewhat unique to Hawaii makes it easier for homeless to sustain themselves out in the open. Watson also gave a small gibe towards public shelters for homeless individuals in her statement, which goes to show just one of the opinions that the homeless have on these homeless relief methods.
In essence, the cycle of having a high cost housing market/living has resulted in quite a bit of homeless in Hawaii, which does take its toll on the society. Having a large population of homeless has had a domino effect that has led to a struggling economy. Leaving the problem as is will only put Hawaii’s economy in a deeper hole that it is already dug itself into.
4 comments
Great writing! The purpose of this essay is clear and well focused on. The audience of the essay understands the focus of the essay and apperciates the telling of the topic. The form of the topic is effective and is appropriate for the topic. The topic is throughly covered and the focus is clear. The flow of the essay is nice. It helps the reader stay focus on the topic and be able to show the feeling of the essay. The voice is aincere and honest, which enhances the feel of the topic/essay. Though it could have a little bit more personal comments. To give the reader the feel that you care about your writing. The writing does succeeds in informing the reader about your topic
ReplyDeleteThis is a well written essay, I'll tell you that. You have a clear purpose of what you are trying to say, I can tell from reading this article that you were trying to inform me about Hawaii's housing economy and stayed on it. Now I'm not too sure who is the specific audience, but I do know that if any random person read it, they would understand exactly what you had to say for your essay, maybe that is your target audience. Your topic is clear, and your thesis clearer. You say something and stick with it while working with what you may have to not only inform the reader, but to make the sentence flow, and the choice of words really impacts you writing too. I can hear you crystal clear, you spoke your heart out, and told me what you had to say, and any information you thought was important to your writing. Though I don't think you added comments of some sort, I mean it's informational, but i cant seem to see your personal thoughts about...anything really. But it's still very informational, and I am persuaded that I too want to help make affordable housing for Hawaii.
ReplyDeleteTAKE A LOOK AT ALL BODY PARAGRAPHS ESPECIALLY THE SECOND AND THIRD AND RECONSIDER YOUR EVIDENCE. YOU NEED STATISTICS THAT PROVE YOUR IDEAS/OPINIONS. LASTLY, EXPAND YOUR CONCLUSION GIVE US A SUMMARY OF IDEAS, RESTATE YOUR THESIS, AND THEN LASTING INSIGHT (WHY THE ISSUE MATTERS, THE IMPORTANCE, ETC.).
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